Very nice... I am new here, but if I may, just a quick suggestion:


Gentle as kittens
ice crystals dance in air,
wind blown

The 'ing' is to be avoided as it take it out of the present moment, and 5-7-5 is not a firm rule in English hiaku... this is a wonderful piece in any case... :)

Mike
www.haikuhut.com

Don't worry, spiders,
I keep house
Casually.

ISSA